by Ian Page
(24) Replaced ‘camp-fire’ with ‘campfire’.
(25) Replaced both occurrences of ‘ante-chamber’ with ‘antechamber’. Replaced ‘terrible glowing’ with ‘terrible, glowing’.
(27) Replaced ‘alley-way’ with ‘alleyway’.
(28) Replaced ‘bodies and unharmed you’ with ‘bodies, and unharmed, you’.
(29) Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.
(31) Replaced ‘ends and at first it’ with ‘ends, and at first, it’. Replaced ‘foaming white’ with ‘foaming, white’. Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘ onto’.
(32) Replaced ‘long range’ with ‘long-range’.
(33) Removed the first choice which read ‘If you have the Kazim Stone, turn to 51.’ since it does not fit into the context of the story, and it is partially redundant as Section 10 contains the same choice.
(34) Replaced ‘shadows you’ with ‘shadows, you’. Replaced ‘menacingly, ‘Slowly’ with ‘menacingly. ‘Slowly’. Replaced ‘or have’ with ‘or if you have’.
(35) Replaced ‘light you’ with ‘light, you’. Replaced ‘wind you’ with ‘wind, you’. Replaced ‘A cool breeze is coming from it, and freshens’ with ‘A cool breeze is coming from it, freshening’. Replaced ‘bones and’ with ‘bones, and’.
(36) Replaced ‘beautiful young’ with ‘beautiful, young’. Replaced ‘hair, all ragged and black, and’ with ‘hair — all ragged and black — and’.
(37) Replaced ‘jailer's’ with ‘Gaoler's’. Replaced ‘these Items’ with ‘these items’.
(38) Replaced ‘journey you’ with ‘journey, you’. Replaced ‘magic you’ with ‘magic, you’. Replaced both occurrences of ‘Alchemy you’ with ‘Alchemy, you’. Replaced ‘power of Alchemy’ with ‘Power of Alchemy’.
(39) Replaced ‘distance you’ with ‘distance, you’. Replaced ‘robes are’ with ‘robes, are’. Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption. Replaced ‘hard-pressed, and have’ with ‘hard-pressed and have’.
(40) Replaced ‘street and’ with ‘street, and’. Replaced both occurrences of ‘alley-way’ with ‘alleyway’.
(42) Replaced ‘Masters, and’ with ‘Masters and’.
(43) Replaced ‘1 small vial of Laumspur’ with ‘Small Vial of Laumspur’. Replaced ‘1 Coil of Rope’ with ‘Coil of Rope’. Replaced ‘A Tinderbox’ with ‘Tinderbox’. Replaced ‘semi-circle’ with ‘semicircle’. Replaced ‘these Items’ with ‘these items’. Replaced ‘power of Prophecy’ with ‘Power of Prophecy’.
(44) Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘ onto’.
(47) Replaced ‘Half-way’ with ‘Halfway’. Replaced ‘cry you’ with ‘cry, you’.
(49) Replaced ‘silver Charm’ with ‘Silver Charm’.
(50) Replaced ‘driver and as he draws closer you’ with ‘driver, and as he draws closer, you’.
(51) Replaced ‘Special Item’ with ‘Backpack Item’.
(52) Replaced ‘Azan river’ with ‘Azan River’.
(53) Replaced ‘power of Prophecy’ with ‘Power of Prophecy’. Replaced ‘who he then’ with ‘whom he then’.
(54) Replaced ‘power of Prophecy’ with ‘Power of Prophecy’.
(56) Replaced ‘you makes’ with ‘you make’.
(58) Replaced ‘Then after’ with ‘Then, after’. Replaced ‘Alchemy you’ with ‘Alchemy, you’. Replaced ‘points you’ with ‘points, you’. Replaced ‘power of Alchemy’ with ‘Power of Alchemy’.
(62) Replaced ‘matter of factly’ with ‘matter-of-factly’. Replaced ‘body, is dead.’ ’ with ‘body, ‘is dead.’ ’.
(64) Replaced ‘alley-ways’ with ‘alleyways’.
(65) Replaced ‘Salve of Yabari ointment’ with ‘Yabari Ointment’.
(66) Replaced ‘mercy; a’ with ‘mercy: a’.
(68) Replaced ‘came across’ with ‘come across’.
(72) Replaced ‘room, finally’ with ‘room. Finally’.
(73) Replaced ‘acid’ with ‘Acid’. Replaced ‘cautiously you’ with ‘cautiously, you’. Replaced ‘power of Prophecy’ with ‘Power of Prophecy’. Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘onto’.
(74) Replaced ‘weakly; ‘I’ with ‘weakly. ‘I’. Replaced ‘Shan, its’ with ‘Shan; it's’.
(77) Replaced ‘ante-chamber’ with ‘antechamber’.
(81) Replaced ‘crossbowmen emitting’ with ‘crossbowmen, emitting’.
(82) Replaced ‘fishermen and’ with ‘fishermen, and’. Replaced ‘drunkards and’ with ‘drunkards, and’. Replaced ‘or would’ with ‘or if you would’.
(84) Replaced ‘desperation you’ with ‘desperation, you’.
(86) Replaced ‘out-distance’ with ‘outdistance’. Replaced ‘cliff face’ with ‘cliff-face’. Replaced ‘You repeat your prophecy to Shan and, taking his arm, you break into a trot’ with ‘Taking Shan's arm, you break into a trot’ since it is possible to arrive here without having used the Power of Prophecy.
(87) Replaced ‘this Item as’ with ‘this Amulet as’. Replaced ‘fear throughout’ with ‘fear, throughout’. Replaced ‘floor: and’ with ‘floor, and’. Replaced ‘jailer's’ with ‘Gaoler's’. Replaced ‘power of Evocation’ with ‘Power of Evocation’. Replaced ‘this Item’ with ‘this item’. Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption. Replaced ‘jailer’ with ‘gaoler’.
(88) Replaced ‘arches’ with ‘arcs’.
(90) Replaced ‘camp-fire’ with ‘campfire’. Replaced ‘power of Sorcery’ with ‘Power of Sorcery’.
(91) Replaced ‘Tinderbox you’ with ‘Tinderbox, you’.
(92) Replaced ‘power of Prophecy’ with ‘Power of Prophecy’. Replaced ‘this power’ with ‘this Power’.
(95) Replaced ‘this power’ with ‘this Power’. Replaced ‘or lack’ with ‘or if you lack’.
(96) Replaced ‘instant you’ with ‘instant, your’. Replaced ‘points and’ with ‘points, and’.
(98) Replaced ‘creature but’ with ‘creature, but’. Replaced ‘upwards and’ with ‘upwards, and’. In the second choice, replaced ‘If you have your Wizard's Staff and wish to use it to cast a light’ with ‘If you would rather exert 1 WILLPOWER point to create a small glow from your Wizard's Staff’ as in Section 19 since you will always have your Staff, but not necessarily the WILLPOWER to use it. Replaced ‘these Items’ with ‘these items’. Replaced ‘Tinderbox and’ with ‘Tinderbox, and’. Replaced ‘or do’ with ‘or if you do’.
(99) Replaced ‘5 Shadakine’ with ‘Shadakine’. Replaced ‘combat, and’ with ‘combat and’. Replaced ‘bridge, at’ with ‘bridge at’.
(100) Replaced ‘warriors and’ with ‘warriors, and’.
(101) Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.
(102) Replaced ‘fades, and’ with ‘fades and’. Replaced ‘eyeslits’ with ‘eye-slits’.
(103) Replaced ‘Mantiz the’ with ‘Mantiz, the’.
(105) Replaced ‘power of Prophecy, and’ with ‘Power of Prophecy and’. Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption. Replaced ‘merchant and’ with ‘merchant, and’ in the illustration's caption.
(108) Replaced ‘low and’ with ‘low, and’. Replaced ‘straighter you’ with ‘straighter, you’.
(109) Replaced ‘right you’ with ‘right, you’. Replaced both occurrences of ‘jailer’ with ‘gaoler’.
(110) Replaced ‘lost.’ with ‘lost,’.
(112) Put semicolons between the items in the list of overheard conversation and changed ‘Dreams.’ ‘Save’ to ‘Dreams. Save’. Replaced ‘warriors, and’ with ‘warriors and’.
(113) Replaced both occurrences of ‘cliff face’ with ‘cliff-face’. Replaced ‘outstretched hand’ with ‘outstretched hand,’.
(114) Replaced ‘power of Prophecy’ with ‘Power of Prophecy’.
(116) Replaced ‘Sorcery,turn to 226’ with ‘Sorcery, turn to 226’.
(117) Replaced ‘war cries’ with ‘war-cries’. Replaced ‘fur
y the’ with ‘fury, the’. Replaced ‘staff and’ with ‘staff, and’. Replaced ‘despatch’ with ‘dispatch’.
(118) Replaced ‘below and’ with ‘below, and’.
(119) Replaced ‘tighten, then’ with ‘tighten, and then’. Replaced ‘suddenly, wilt’ with ‘suddenly wilt’.
(122) Replaced ‘care you’ with ‘care, you’. Replaced ‘minutes the’ with ‘minutes, the’.
(123) Replaced ‘eyeslits’ with ‘eye-slits’.
(124) Replaced each occurrence of ‘jailer’ with ‘gaoler’. Replaced ‘Jailer’ with ‘Gaoler’.
(125) Replaced ‘jailer's’ with ‘gaoler's’. Replaced ‘open and’ with ‘open, and’. Replaced ‘the Keys’ with ‘the Gaoler's Keys’.
(127) Replaced ‘excited mob roar their’ with ‘excited mob roars its’.
(128) Replaced ‘Calacena mushrooms, and’ with ‘Calacena Mushrooms, and’. Replaced ‘this power’ with ‘this Power’. Replaced ‘or do’ with ‘or if you do’.
(129) Replaced ‘Shan, ‘She’ with ‘Shan. ‘She’. Replaced ‘ante-chamber’ with ‘antechamber’.
(131) Replaced ‘Shadakine empire’ with ‘Shadakine Empire’.
(132) Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘onto’. Replaced ‘crossbowman and’ with ‘crossbowman, and’.
(133) Replaced ‘Cut-Throat’ with ‘Cut-throat’. Replaced ‘death, and’ with ‘death and’.
(136) Replaced ‘lightly, and’ with ‘lightly and’. Replaced ‘danger,turn to 345’ with ‘danger, turn to 345’. Replaced ‘this power’ with ‘this Power’. Replaced ‘or would’ with ‘or if you would’.
(137) Replaced ‘stairs, which’ with ‘stairs which’.
(138) Replaced ‘cliff face’ with ‘cliff-face’.
(139) Replaced ‘far sinister’ with ‘far more sinister’. Replaced ‘eyeslits’ with ‘eye-slits’.
(140) Replaced ‘sail-ships’ with ‘sail ships’. Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.
(142) Replaced ‘jailer's’ with ‘Gaoler's’.
(143) Replaced ‘this power’ with ‘this Power’.
(144) Replaced ‘escape and, as’ with ‘escape, and as’.
(145) Replaced ‘long range attack’ with ‘long-range attack’.
(146) Replaced ‘floor, entrances’ with ‘floor — entrances’. Replaced ‘the undergrowth’ with ‘the undergrowth,’.
(148) Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘ onto’.
(149) Replaced ‘screams, ‘a’ with ‘screams. ‘A’ and added to the choice text ‘ or have defeated the Kleasá within three rounds’.
(150) Replaced ‘prys’ with ‘pries’. Replaced ‘zero, or lower’ with ‘zero or below’ and reversed the order of the choices. Replaced ‘above zero or’ with ‘above zero, or’.
(151) Replaced ‘sulphur’ with ‘Sulphur’. Replaced ‘saltpetre’ with ‘Saltpetre’. Replaced ‘crystals’ with ‘Crystals’. Replaced ‘different power’ with ‘different Power’.
(152) Replaced ‘open and’ with ‘open, and’.
(153) Replaced ‘power of Sorcery’ with ‘Power of Sorcery’. Replaced ‘this power or’ with ‘this Power, or if you’.
(157) Replaced ‘this power’ with ‘this Power’.
(158) Replaced ‘pain, due’ with ‘pain due’. Replaced ‘pounds and’ with ‘pounds, and’.
(159) Replaced ‘power of Sorcery’ with ‘Power of Sorcery’. Replaced ‘power of Alchemy’ with ‘Power of Alchemy’.
(161) Replaced ‘A Silver Ring’ with ‘Silver Charm’. Replaced ‘A Broadsword’ with ‘Broadsword (Weapon)’. Replaced ‘2 potions of Laumspur’ with ‘2 Potions of Laumspur’. Replaced ‘A coil of Rope’ with ‘Coil of Rope’. Replaced ‘power of Alchemy’ with ‘Power of Alchemy’. Replaced ‘backpacks and’ with ‘backpacks, and’.
(164) Removed the parentheses. Replaced ‘Azan river’ with ‘Azan River’.
(165) Replaced ‘creature you’ with ‘creature, you’. Replaced ‘zero or less’ with ‘zero or below’.
(167) Replaced ‘you,’ ’ with ‘you!’ ’.
(168) Replaced ‘west and’ with ‘west, and’.
(169) Replaced ‘crossbowman, who’ with ‘crossbowman who’.
(170) Replaced ‘acid’ with ‘Acid’.
(171) Replaced ‘these Items’ with ‘these items’.
(172) Replaced ‘these powers’ with ‘these Powers’. Replaced each occurrence of ‘power’ with ‘Power’.
(175) Replaced ‘power young’ with ‘power, young’. Replaced ‘willpower’ with ‘WILLPOWER’. Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.
(176) Replaced ‘jailer's’ with ‘Gaoler's’. Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘onto’.
(178) Replaced ‘or would’ with ‘or if you would’.
(181) Replaced ‘elemental plane’ with ‘Elemental Plane’.
(183) Removed the line of periods from the first item. Replaced ‘1 jar of Ezeran crystals’ with ‘1 Jar of Ezeran Crystals’. Replaced ‘with sulphur)’ with ‘with sulphur).’. Replaced ‘A Pestle and Mortar’ with ‘Pestle and Mortar’. Replaced ‘1 bottle of Naptha’ with ‘1 Bottle of Naphtha’. Replaced ‘1 vial of Graveweed essence’ with ‘1 Vial of Graveweed Essence’. Replaced ‘1 vial of Alether’ with ‘1 Vial of Alether’. Replaced ‘1 bundle of dried Azawood leaves’ with ‘1 Bundle of dried Azawood Leaves’. Replaced ‘seeds’ with ‘Seeds’. Replaced ‘these Items’ with ‘these items’.
(184) Replaced ‘cliff face’ with ‘cliff-face’.
(186) Replaced ‘away hoping’ with ‘away, hoping’.
(187) Replaced ‘tortuous’ with ‘tortured’. Replaced ‘visited’ with ‘been arrested at’. Replaced ‘Jailer’ with ‘Gaoler’.
(189) Replaced ‘can not’ with ‘cannot’.
(190) Replaced ‘way Grey’ with ‘way, Grey’. Replaced ‘north, and’ with ‘north and’. Replaced ‘south, and’ with ‘south and’. Removed ‘at the front of the book’.
(191) Changed the second choice to lead to Section 314 instead of Section 150 and the third choice to lead to Section 288 instead of Section 320. These sections were unreachable in the original and make much more sense in the context of the story. Replaced ‘astral plane, and’ with ‘Astral Plane and’.
(193) Replaced ‘A Pestle and Mortar’ with ‘Pestle and Mortar (Backpack Item)’. Replaced ‘A packet of Ezeran crystals’ with ‘Packet of Ezeran Crystals’. Replaced ‘1 jar of Yabari ointment’ with ‘Jar of Yabari Ointment’. Replaced ‘seeds’ with ‘Seeds’. Replaced ‘the Items’ with ‘the items’.
(194) Replaced ‘waist, with’ with ‘waist with’. Replaced ‘closer and’ with ‘closer, and’. Replaced ‘Shan but, overwhelmed’ with ‘Shan, but overwhelmed’.
(195) Replaced ‘street, which’ with ‘street which’. Replaced ‘sign, which reads.:’ with ‘sign which reads:’.
(197) Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.
(199) Replaced each occurrence of ‘power’ with ‘Power’.
(200) Replaced all instances of ‘alley-ways’ with ‘alleyways’. Added the following choice: ‘If you have the Magical Power of Prophecy and wish to use it, turn to 64.’ This is to parallel Section 40.
(201) Replaced ‘your powers’ with ‘your Powers’.
(202) Replaced ‘eyes and with your hands raised you’ with ‘eyes, and with your hands raised, you’. Replaced ‘elemental plane’ with ‘Elemental Plane’.
(204) Replaced ‘leg, the’ with ‘leg; the’.
(206) Replaced ‘fungi enables’ with ‘fungi enable’.
(207) Replaced ‘light and’ with ‘light, and’. Replaced ‘enemies, who’ with ‘enemies who’.
(208) Replaced ‘crossbowmen with your Wizard's Staff, at long range,’ with ‘crossbowmen at long range with your Wizard's Staff,’.
(209) Replaced ‘vial of Pink Liquid’ with ‘Vial of Pink Liquid’. Replaced each occurrence of ‘Items’ with ‘items’.
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(211) Replaced ‘Evocation or wish’ with ‘Evocation, or if you wish’.
(213) Replaced ‘length you’ with ‘length, you’.
(214) Replaced ‘breath’ with ‘breathe’. Replaced ‘power of Prophecy’ with ‘Power of Prophecy’. Replaced ‘jailer’ with ‘gaoler’.
(215) Replaced ‘fight but’ with ‘fight, but’. Replaced ‘1 potion of Randalim's Elixir’ with ‘Potion of Rendalim's Elixir’. Replaced both occurrences of ‘herb warden’ with ‘herbwarden’. Replaced ‘A Pestle’ with ‘Pestle’. Replaced ‘3 Tarama flower seeds’ with ‘3 Tarama Seeds’. Replaced ‘Sealed pouch of Calacena mushrooms’ with ‘Sealed pouch of Calacena Mushrooms’. Replaced ‘power of Enchantment’ with ‘Power of Enchantment’. Replaced ‘the Items’ with ‘the items’. Replaced ‘on to’ with ‘ onto’.
(216) Replaced ‘barbs, plunging’ with ‘barbs plunging’.
(217) Replaced ‘It it's’ with ‘If it's’. Replaced ‘table. ‘they're’ with ‘table. ‘They're’. Replaced ‘narrow and’ with ‘narrow, and’.
(218) Replaced ‘well and’ with ‘well, and’. Replaced ‘Village’ with ‘village’.
(221) Replaced ‘ante-chamber’ with ‘antechamber’. Replaced ‘intones and’ with ‘intones, and’. Replaced ‘mark it as a Special Item’ with ‘mark this Backpack Item’. Replaced ‘wall and’ with ‘wall, and’. Replaced ‘compartment, roughly’ with ‘compartment roughly’. Replaced ‘stone, and’ with ‘stone and’.
(223) Replaced ‘alley-way’ with ‘alleyway’. Replaced ‘gutters and’ with ‘gutters, and’.
(224) Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.
(225) Replaced ‘half-way’ with ‘halfway’. Replaced ‘closer and’ with ‘closer, and’.
(229) Replaced ‘wish, at long range, to attack’ with ‘wish to launch a long-range attack on’.
(230) Replaced ‘back and’ with ‘back, and’.
(231) Replaced ‘toes and’ with ‘toes, and’. Replaced ‘long-range’ with ‘long range’.
(232) Replaced ‘bloody you’ with ‘bloody, you’. Replaced ‘you and’ with ‘you, and’. Replaced ‘defer’ with ‘deter’.
(233) Added a period to the end of the illustration's caption.
(236) In the last sentence of the first paragraph, replaced the comma with ellipsis and followed the sentence with ellipsis.