Finally, when I was a very young novice writer, my neighbor Nancy Vedder-Shults offered to critique one of my first completed stories. Her comments were both incisive and supportive, and gave me the tools I needed to begin to edit my writing; her encouragement since then has been unfailing. Every young writer should have a mentor as insightful and kind as Nancy.
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Naomi Kritzer’s
Turning the
Storm
The riveting conclusion to Eliana’s tale
Coming in January 2003
Here’s a special excerpt:
“Eliana? Eliana!” Giovanni stared down at me, flushed in the late summer heat. I squinted up at him and he sat back, looking relieved. “That was one hell of a fall.”
I groaned and lay still for a moment. Two months of leading an army—two more successful battles, even—and I still couldn’t stay on my horse and reload a crossbow at the same time. I pushed myself up with my elbows. “Nothing hurts,” I said. That was blatantly false, but nothing especially hurt. “I must have just had the wind knocked out of me.” I turned to glare at Forza, my horse. She had skidded to a stop shortly after throwing me, and was staring at me with wary sheepishness from farther down the hill.
“It’s getting late anyway,” he said. “Let’s just make a quick circuit of the hill and head in.”
“Where’d the bow land?”
“Got it,” Giovanni said. I stood up and Giovanni handed it back to me. “Let’s go.” He whistled for Stivali, the horse he’d claimed from the Ravenessi stables, and we remounted, turning to head back to the army encampment.
“Hold on,” I said, reining in Forza. “Who the hell is that?”
Giovanni turned to look north and squinted at the figure walking toward us. “I don’t know.” He unslung his own crossbow and cocked it. “But whoever it is, he’s alone.”
The man headed straight toward us. He seemed to be carrying weapons but had not drawn. I loaded my crossbow—easy enough now that Forza was standing still—and checked behind us in case the man was supposed to be a distraction. I saw nobody but stayed on my guard. We had an outer ring of sentries, but this man, at least, had gotten past them unchallenged.
“Hello there!” the man said, saluting us as he approached. “I come in peace, to meet with your leaders. I assume you are soldiers of the Lupi?”
Giovanni’s eyes narrowed and he squinted down the sights of his crossbow. “Maybe.”
I decided to let Giovanni go ahead and intimidate the stranger. He wouldn’t fire without cause, and I found the stranger’s breezy manner irritating. “What do you want with the Lupi?” I demanded.
The stranger bowed low, showing off a freshly sunburned neck. “My name is Felice. I have come from Cuore as the delegate of the reformers.”
Giovanni lowered his crossbow just a hair. “Fire falls from the sky,” he said challengingly.
“And the land weeps,” Felice said.
Giovanni lowered his bow completely. “I guess you are who you say you are. We’re—”
“—pleased to make your acquaintance,” I said, cutting Giovanni off. “We’ll take you back to the camp.” I swung down from my horse and confiscated Felice’s visible weapons—a decorative sword and an ornately carved crossbow. I was not so impressed by a two-year-old password that I was going to tell this man that he’d just met the generali of the Lupi army, alone. For all we knew, he was a spy on a suicide mission to kill us both. “You can ride double with me.”
Felice mounted Forza effortlessly and I climbed up awkwardly behind him. I regretted not making him ride with Giovanni but said nothing, not wanting to look foolish. We rode back toward camp.
Felice even smelled like an aristocrat: clean, despite his long walk, with a very faint whiff of perfume. His tunic was made out of a delicate fabric that caught the light oddly, and was covered with a well-tooled padded leather vest. His hands carried the light calluses of a gentleman-fencer, like Giovanni—except Giovanni did some real work these days.
Back in camp, I dismounted and passed the horses off to Vitale, the youngest of the Lupi. He’d joined us when we’d liberated that first slave camp after Ravenna. I’d tried to send him off to Doratura or one of the other resettled towns, but he’d stubbornly followed us across the wasteland until I shrugged and said that anyone so determined was clearly old enough to make himself useful. “Take Forza and Stivali,” I said to Vitale. “And tell Michel we need him right away.”
Vitale vanished into the camp, and Giovanni and I stood awkwardly, facing Felice. I wanted a private moment with Giovanni, to ask him the significance of the pass-phrase and how secret it really was, but I needed Michel to take custody of Felice first. Fortunately, Michel arrived almost immediately, still tying his sash. He was rumpled, and I suspected he’d been napping. “Michel,” I said. “This is Felice, allegedly one of the reformers from Cuore. Take him to the generali’s tent; they’ll be with him shortly.”
Michel picked up his cue and saluted without addressing either of us as “Generale.”
“Please follow me,” he said, and led Felice off toward my tent.
I turned to Giovanni. “What was it he said to you?”
“It’s a pass-phrase—”
“I guessed that. How secure is it? Couldn’t he have found it out some other way?”
“We can trust him,” Giovanni said confidently. “He’s been sent by Beneto’s commanders. I’m just surprised it took them this long. We ought to have a contact with the main University Reform organization.”
“Really.” I stared off past Giovanni’s shoulder. An argument was brewing between two of my men over whose turn it was to dig latrine trenches. “Hey!” I shouted, and they both jumped to give me a guilty stare. “It’s both your turns. Fight over it and you’ll be filling them in, too.” I turned back to Giovanni. “Well, let’s go see what he wants, then.” I caught Vitale as he passed by. “Send Lucia to my tent when you get a chance. I don’t want Isabella, not yet. Try to get Lucia alone.”
Giovanni beamed as we entered the tent. My tent was larger than Rafi’s tent in Ravenna had been but not a whole lot higher; we didn’t have much in the way of real tent poles. Felice sat cross-legged on a cushion, looking around dubiously at the rough accommodations.
“Welcome to the Lupi encampment,” Giovanni said. “I am Generale Giovanni, and this is Generale Eliana.”
I nodded to Felice, returning his aghast look with a predatory smile. “Charmed,” I said.
Felice closed his mouth with a snap, but his eyes were still wide. “Really? I’d pictured you”—he studied me, his lips parted—“differently.”
“Were you expecting me to be taller?” I asked. I glanced toward the tent flap, wondering how long it would take Lucia to arrive. “Male?”
“No, no, no. Of course we knew your, ah, basic description. Older, I’d say. I guess I’d assumed you’d be older.”
“Hmm.” I decided to let him stop flailing. “I suppose you’re expecting us to bring you up-to-date.”
“That would be helpful, yes.”
Lucia came in and sat next to me. “This is Felice,” I said. “He claims to be a reformer from Cuore.”
“Do you know him, Giovanni?” Lucia asked.
“No,” Giovanni said.
“I joined the Cause after you departed for Ravenna,” Felice said. “I am originally from Parma.”
Lucia gave Felice a long, careful stare. I looked at her; she shrugged.
“Well,” I said, “you probably know that we led the uprising at Ravenna.” Felice nodded. “That was about a month and a half ago. We’ve liberated three more slave labor camps since our escape, adding former slaves to our army when possible.” Our army had doubled in size from the original group, but then the other camps had been smaller than Ravenna.
“At the last camp, reinforcements had been sent down,” Giovanni said. “Fortunately, they had not been well integrated. The new troops and the old did n
ot trust each other and fought together poorly. Still, we can’t count on that being true everywhere.”
“What sort of training have you done with your men?” Felice asked.
“Tactics,” I said. “Some sword training, and bow.”
“Three victories,” Felice said. “That’s quite something.”
“Minimal losses,” I said. “That’s something we hope to keep up.”
“Any problems?” Felice asked.
“Well, you know, we’re fighting a war,” I said. “People get injured sometimes, or die. That’s a problem.”
“But other than that?” Felice asked.
There were the constant petty squabbles, the rivalries between the original Lupi and the mutineer soldiers from Ravenna, the constant shortage of supplies, and the fact that half of the people I’d impulsively made leaders couldn’t lead their way out of a stable if you drew them a map, but I wasn’t about to share those problems with Felice. “That’s pretty much it.”
“Well,” Felice said, his face lighting up. “Sounds like you’re in good shape, then.” I nodded. “So, anyway, I’m here to take over.”
I froze, not entirely sure I’d heard right. Lucia’s jaw dropped, then she closed her mouth and sat back quietly, her eyes flickering from me to Giovanni and back. The slight quirk of her lips made it clear she was waiting for the show.
“You’re here to what?” Giovanni demanded, just barely restraining himself from attacking Felice. “I am doing just fine myself, thank you very much.”
“Oh, er, yes, of course,” Felice said, glancing from Giovanni’s face to mine. “Of course you’re doing fine. We really appreciate what an excellent job you’ve done since Beneto’s execution. The reformer leaders in Cuore have voted to give both of you a commendation, in fact. But you have to understand, a position like this requires someone with experience—”
I cut him off with a raised hand. “So how many armies have you led into battle?”
“Oh, I’m very good at strategy,” Felice said confidently. “I won nineteen out of twenty-five mock battles with my tutor—”
I laughed. “You’re not taking my army away from me.”
“Excuse me?”
“You heard me. Signore Felice, you can try to command here if you enjoy being laughed at, but this is my army. If you think we’re putting our men into your manicured hands, think again. You don’t command here; I do.”
Felice was putting on a patient expression, and that did it. “Michel!” I said.
Michel was waiting outside the tent and poked his head in. “Yes, Generale?”
“Take this man to the stockade and place him under guard. He is not to be left alone at any time.”
Michel took Felice’s arm. “If you’ll come with me, signore,” he said.
“But—but—wait—” Felice said as Michel started to haul him off.
“Oh, one more thing, Michel,” I said. “He’s a guest. Treat him with courtesy.”
“He won’t have anything to complain about, Generale.”
The tent was quiet for a moment after Felice had gone.
“I don’t know if that was quite appropriate—” Giovanni started.
“If he’s going to stay here,” I said, “I want him to be absolutely clear on who’s in charge. Besides,” and I relaxed slightly, “what an ass.”
Lucia laughed. “I agree. Let him cool his heels in the stockade for an hour or two at least.…”
Giovanni was opening his mouth to say something else when Isabella came into the tent. At least Michel was gone by the time she arrived. “Who’s the fop?” she demanded.
“An old friend of Giovanni’s,” Lucia said. “The reformers sent him to take over.”
Isabella looked at me with a single raised eyebrow.
“I declined his generous offer,” I said.
“Just what is it you hope to accomplish by locking him up?” Giovanni demanded. “Fine, you get to gloat, but is there really any point to this, or is it just to humiliate him?”
I leaned forward. “I’ve seen no reason that I should trust him. There’s nowhere else in this encampment designed to keep people under guard. So until I’m convinced that he’s not a threat, he stays in the stockade.”
Giovanni snorted. “A threat? That pretty-boy probably had a servant to reload his crossbow back in Cuore. You’re actually afraid of him?”
“I’ve got enough things to worry about without Felice,” I said. “I promise I’ll have Michel let him out soon. Do you want to go see about the scout reports?”
Giovanni left, still grumbling, leaving Lucia and Isabella in the tent with me. Unfortunately, Isabella showed no inclination to leave. She pulled up a cushion to sit on and poured herself a cup of tea. “Generale,” she said, “I wonder if I could have a word with you.”
I suppressed a groan; when Isabella called me Generale, it usually meant that she wanted something. She was going to have her word with me sooner or later, so I poured my own cup of tea and sat back to listen, gesturing for her to go ahead.
“Yesterday you ordered one of my people to scrub pots for insubordination.”
“Which?” I asked, trying to remember who’d gotten in trouble recently.
“Gemino.”
“Ah, right.” Gemino was a short, stocky boy who’d come with us from Ravenna. Isabella led a unit within my army, but it was made up mostly of “her people,” the old-time malcontents who’d followed her in Ravenna. “Isabella, you aren’t going to have me reduce his punishment, are you? It’s not like scrubbing pots is that dreadful a task, and someone has to—”
“It’s not this instance so much as it is a general pattern. The problem was not Gemino, it was Michel. You should realize that by now.”
“I thought I told Gemino he didn’t have to take weaponry lessons from Michel anymore.”
“You did. This wasn’t a weaponry lesson. Michel was trying to give my people orders, and Gemino refused—”
Now I remembered. “Isabella, Michel was trying to tell Gemino he needed to move the horses. It was a perfectly reasonable request—”
“—and coming from anyone else, it might have sounded reasonable. Michel can make the most reasonable request sound like an insult.”
“So what do you want me to do?”
“Michel needs to be taken down a peg.” Isabella’s large eyes glared at me from behind a stray lock of gray hair. “He’s unsuited to a position of authority.”
This was true. Michel was unsuited to a position of authority. But so was Isabella and most of my unit commanders. “I need him where he is,” I said.
“But Gemino—”
“I’ll tell Michel again to stay away from your soldiers.” We’d be fine if I could find enough other things for Michel to do. Or if I could somehow keep him and Isabella permanently separated. The trouble was, I really did need him where he was. I needed his loyalty, his skills as a bodyguard, and his ability to get things done for me. He wasn’t a bad soldier, but the power had gone to his head. I just wished I knew what to do about it. Isabella’s suggestion had merit, except that if I hurt his pride, I might lose his loyalty—or he might simply leave. And I needed him too badly. Besides, if I disciplined Michel, I’d have to do something about all the lousy unit commanders, including Isabella. I had removed the really atrocious ones—the lecher, and the coward, and the one who turned out to be dumb as a donkey—but if I set about trying to ensure that only the best were in positions of authority, we’d be left with me, the woman who led the scouts, and Giovanni on his good days.
“Well, thank you, Generale,” Isabella said stiffly, and took her leave.
Alone with Lucia, I sighed. “Are you sure you don’t want to command a unit, Lucia?”
“And have Isabella on my back, as well as yours and Michel’s?” Lucia raised an eyebrow. “Positive.”
“So.” I wiped out my teacup and put it away. “What’s on my list?”
Lucia considered for a moment. “The scouts ar
e due back this evening but probably won’t get in until late tonight. If they’re not back by morning, we’ll have to assume that they were captured. That’s the most significant news.”
I nodded.
“Other than that … We’re in pretty good shape for grain, but we’re low on horse feed. If we absolutely have to, we can feed some of our wheat to the horses, but for obvious reasons that’s not the best option. In any case, it’s critical that we capture food at the next camp. And if they have horses, we should send them north with the refugees, rather than keeping them ourselves. Cavalry is nice, but we just don’t have the food stocks.”
I nodded; she was right, although this would only increase resentment among the people who didn’t have horses but thought they should. Never mind that most of these people could barely ride, let alone fight from horseback; a horse was a symbol of status, so everyone wanted one.
“Other than that … Nerio and Viola split and have made quite a fuss about it.”
“Move them into separate units. I don’t care if they reconcile and miss each other; we’re keeping them separate from now on. This is, what, the fourth time?”
“Fifth. Let’s see. Ulpio and Bruttio were fighting.”
“Latrine duty.”
“Paulo and Severo are rumored to be spoiling for a fight.”
“Paulo and Severo?” They were two more of the men I’d put in charge of units—and now regretted putting in charge. “What’s their problem?”
“Paulo’s convinced you’re favoring Severo’s men. He wants a horse, and he thinks you’re sending his men to dig latrines and scrub pots a bit too often. He blames Severo for turning you against him.”
I sighed. “Remind me to ease up on Paulo’s men. He’s wrong, but it’s not worth losing his loyalty over. Maybe I should give him a horse.” I looked up; Lucia gazed at me levelly, a glint of humor in her eyes. I sighed again. “Once we’re out of the wasteland, the horses can graze—”
“According to Giovanni’s calculations, that won’t be until the end of the summer.”
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