[XW49]Compound modifier with suspended hyphen. Soot- and debris-covered kitchen = soot-covered and debris-covered kitchen.
[XW50]Compound modifier. Hyphenate.
[XW51]Revised to eliminate awkwardness.
[XW52]Pronoun usage. Subject pronoun (she) vs. object pronoun (her).
[XW53]BritishEnglish spellng vs. America English spellng.
[XW54]Oxford comma.
[XW55]Comma after interrupter.
[XW56]Proper format for dialogue interrupted by thought/action without a dialogue tag.
[XW57]Spelling and capitalizatin per the manufacturer.
[XW58]1A comma is not used when a subordinate (dependent) clause follows an independent clause (complete sentence). A comma is used between the two when the subordinate clause introduces the independent clause.
[XW59]Oxford comma.
[XW60]Consistency with name as introduced.
[XW61]1Comma before coordinating conjunction connecting independent clauses.
[XW62]Deleted. We know this is out loud because it is in quotation marks, which indicate spoken words.
[XW63]Shined vs. shone.
[XW64]1Comma before coordinating conjunction connecting independent clauses.
[XW65]Lay vs. lie.
[XW66]Comma before and after parenthetical element.
[XW67] Revised to read/flow more smoothly.
[XW68]In the middle of the row of what? The row of beds? The row of rooms?
[XW69]Compound modifier. Hyphenate.
[XW70]Earlier (page 61), Lucy believed her blood type was O positive. When did she learn it was AB negative? Nobody ever came out and told her she had a different blood type. Did Lucy figure out she must be AB negative (and have the antigen) since she has powers? Suggest including something to reflect that Lucy figured it out or was told.
[XW71]1Comma after conditional (if) statement introducing independent clause.
[XW72]Verb tense—should be past tense as with the rest of the narrative.
[XW73]Changed to but to eliminate comma splice.
[XW74]1Comma after prepositional phrase introducing independent clause.
[XW75]Compound modifiers formed with adverbs ending in LY are generally not hyphenated.
[XW76]Subject-verb agreement. When a sentence starts with there, the true subject is the noun or noun phrase that follows the verb. In this case, it is two ways, which is plural and requires a plural verb.
[XW77]1No comma. And is not connecting two independent clauses or separating three or more items/actions.
[XW78]Compound modifier. Hyphenate.
[XW79]Oxford comma.
[XW80]A comma should not separate the parts of an either...or clause.
[XW81]Comma between comparative correlative clauses.
[XW82]Verb tense—should be past tense as with the rest of the narrative.
[XW83]Verb tense. The past participle (drunk) needs to be used instead of the past tense (drank) when have/had is used.
[XW84]Put in italics as they are communicating telepathically through thought.
[XW85]Use one or the other. Both mean the same thing.
[XW86]Comma splice. However is a conjunctive adverb. When it is used to connect two complete sentences, use a semicolon before it and a comma after it.
[XW87]Comma before parenthetical element.
[XW88]Changed to eliminate comma splice.
[XW89]Verb tense—should be past tense as with the rest of the narrative.
[XW90]Only hyphenated when used as an adjective before a noun (e.g., face-to-face meeting).
[XW91]Lay vs. lie.
[XW92]Proper format for dialogue interrupted by thought/action without a dialogue tag.
[XW93]Comma before direct address.
[XW94]Lowercase when used in a general sense. Capitalized when used as a direct address in place of the person’s name or as a title with the person’s name.
[XW95]Consistency with spelling.
[XW96]Compound modifier. Hyphenate.
[XW97]Comma splice.
[XW98]Deleted. Redundant. A nod only means yes.
[XW99]Added for clarity and logic.
[XW100]Deleted. Not necessary. Slows the pacing.
[XW101]Pallet vs. palette. Homophones.
[XW102]Oxford comma.
[XW103]Compound modifier. Hyphenate.
[XW104]No comma. And is connecting the two explanations.
[XW105]Comma after parenthetical element.
[XW106]Lay vs. lie.
[XW107]Comma before interrupter.
[XW108]Deleted. This doesn’t fit here and makes the sentence read awkwardly. It’s also not necessary to the plot/scene.
[XW109]1No comma. So in this instance is abbreviated from so that. “So that” tells us for what purpose something is done. “So” tells us the effect. “So” is preceded by a comma but “so that” is not. The clause with “so that” can come both before and after the independent (or main) clause, whereas “so” cannot change positions but must remain in between both clauses.
[XW110]1Comma before coordinating conjunction connecting independent clauses.
[XW111]Nauseous vs. nauseated.
[XW112]Comma splice.
[XW113]Consistency with capitalization as introduced.
[XW114]Preferred spelling variant.
[XW115]Revised. As originally worded. Mom stormed into her father’s space.
[XW116]Compound modifier. Hyphenate.
[XW117]Changed to Natalee. Her could refer to Kendel, which makes the sentence confusing.
[XW118]Compound modifier. Hyphenate.
[XW119]Comma before direct address.
[XW120]1No comma. And is not connecting two independent clauses or separating three or more items/actions.
[XW121]Only hyphenated when used as an adjective before a noun.
[XW122]Where did this name come from? She’s been Elayna Sandoval the whole story.
[XW123]1Comma before coordinating conjunction connecting independent clauses.
[XW124]Verb tense—should be past tense as with the rest of the narrative.
[XW125]Only hyphenated when used as an adjective before a noun (e.g., side-by-side refrigerator).
[XW126]Comma splice.
[XW127]Not needed. Who else would she say this to?
[XW128]1Use a comma before/after a nonessential appositive. An appositive is a word or word group that defines or further identifies the noun or noun phrase it is next to. An appositive is nonessential when the noun or noun phrase is a precise identifier.
[XW129]Proper format for dialogue interrupted by thought/action without a dialogue tag.
[XW130]Oxford comma.
[XW131]Revised to eliminate dangling modifier. As originally worded, Lucy (I) was perfectly sweetened without syrup.
[XW132]Oxford comma.
[XW133]1No comma. A comma should not be used to replace an implied that.
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