Collected Fiction Volume 2 (1926-1930): A Variorum Edition
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Notes
Editor’s Note: The surviving A.Ms. is HPL’s original draft; it is not as extensively revised and interlined as that of The Case of Charles Dexter Ward, indicating that less polishing was done on what HPL regarded as “practice in carrying plot threads for a considerable distance” (SL 2.99). Barlow prepared a T.Ms. of just over half the text; it contains a few corrections by HPL, including the alteration of some names (e.g., “Thok” for “Throk”). HPL was, however, markedly inconsistent in the recording of species names of his imagined creatures; in my judgment these should be lower-cased (by analogy with the later use of “shoggoth” in At the Mountains of Madness), even when HPL has indicated on the T.Ms. that they should be capitalised. HPL is also inconsistent in other usages as well as in the spelling of some proper names. In the first published appearance (Beyond the Wall of Sleep [Arkham House, 1943]), the editors followed the T.Ms. until it left off, then worked from the A.Ms.
Texts: A = A.Ms. (JHL); B = T.Ms. (by Barlow); C = At the Mountains of Madness and Other Novels (Arkham House, 1965). Copy-text: A (with a few readings from B).
1. colonnades,] colonnades A, B, C
2. gods;] gods, B, C
3. things,] things A, B, C
4. had] had been B, C
5. far,] far B, C
6. prophetick] prophetic C
7. song;] song, C
8. faery] fiery B, C
9. immanence,] imma B; immanence C
10. awaked] awakened B, C
11. priests] priests of B, C
12. oversights,] over-/sights, B; over-sights, C
13. shewn] shown C
14. unknown] om. B, C
15. our] our own B, C
16. reached; but] reached B; reached, but C
17. re-crossed] recrossed C
18. three] three, C
19. daemon-sultan] daemon sultan A, B, C
20. ultimate] Ultimate B, C
21. farewell] formal B, C
22. enchanted wood.] Enchanted Wood. B, C
23. zoogs;] Zoogs; B, C
24. dream-world] dream world A, B, C
25. events,] events A
26. zoogs] Zoogs B, C
27. dream-world] dream world A, B, C
28. Celephaïs] Celephais B, C
29. King] king B
30. zoogs,] Zoogs, B, C
31. near] was in B, C
32. greater] great B, C
33. zoog] Zoog B, C
34. length] last B, C
35. zoogs,] Zoogs, B, C
36. honeycombed] honeycomed A, B
37. zoogs] Zoogs B, C
38. dream-world] dream world A, B, C
39. zoog] Zoog B, C
40. river] River A, B, C
41. Olathoë] Olathoe B, C
42. manuscripts,] manuscripts B, C
43. gods;] gods, B, C
44. zoogs,] Zoogs, B, C
45. zoogs;] Zoogs; B, C
46. zoogs] Zoogs B, C
47. zoogs.] Zoogs. B, C
48. zoogs] Zoogs B, C
49. pier] piece B, C
50. zoogs)] Zoogs) B, C
51. zoogs,] Zoogs, A, B, C
52. crowns] crown C
53. earth’s] Earth’s B, C
54. earth’s] Earth’s B, C
55. earth’s] Earth’s B, C
56. earth’s] Earth’s B, C
57. gods’] god’s B, C
58. dream-world] dream world A, B, C
59. earth’s] Earth’s B, C
60. moon-wine] moon-vine C
61. zoogs] Zoogs B, C
62. recognise] recognize C
63. Ngranek] Ngranck C
64. in] in the C
65. zoogs] Zoogs C
66. heard] heard, B, C
67. zoog] Zoog C
68. zoogs] Zoogs C
69. on] onward B, C
70. tessellated] tesselated B, C
71. arose] rose B, C
72. Giants’] Giant’s B, C
73. sea-taverns] sea taverns A, B, C
74. sea-taverns,] sea taverns, A, B, C
75. sea-taverns] sea taverns A, B, C
76. Baharna,] Barharna, A, B
77. mole] _ale B; wale C
78. gangplank] gang-/plank B; gang-plank C
79. though] although B, C
80. own] om. B, C
81. zoogs’] Zoogs’ A; zoog’s B; Zoog’s C
82. moon-wine] moon-/wine B; moonwine C
83. laughter,] laughter B, C
84. recognised] recognized B, C
85. Zar,] Zak, B, C
86. Xura,] Zura, C
87. malodorous] malodourous B, C
88. on] of B, C
89. hungrily,] hungrily B, C
90. crescent,] crescent B, C
91. wholesome or suitable] suitable or wholesome B, C
92. lurk] be B, C
93. star-strown] star-strewn C
94. grey] gray C
95. recognised] recognized B, C
96. zoogs] Zoogs C
97. peculiar] curious B, C
98. curiously] curious B, C
99. fore-paws.] forepaws. B, C
100. these] the C
101. into] into the C
102. up] om. B, C
103. grey] om. B, C
104. and] or B, C
105. he] I A
106. again] again, B, C
107. almost-human] almost human A, B, C
108. each] either B, C
109. far,] far C
110. onto] upon B, C
111. Manx;] Manx, B, C
112. toad-things] toad things A
113. the beginning . . . of] om. B, C
114. zoogs] Zoogs C
115. recognised] recognized C
116. earth’s] Earth’s B, C
117. of] om. B, C
118. a far] an B, C
119. companions,] companions B, C
120. friendly] friendly, A, B
121. mole] __le B; wale C
122. grey] gray C
123. spoke] spoke with B, C
124. strange-coloured] strange coloured A, B, C
125. Oriab,] Oriab C
126. shore] shores B, C
127. olden] old B, C
128. knick-knacks] knicknacks A, B; knickknacks C
129. around] round B, C
130. him] him, B, C
131. led] lay B, C
132. camps] camp B, C
133. men] man C
134. Kadath,] Kadath; B, C
135. tavern-keeper’s] tavernkeeper’s C
136. Baharna,] Barharna, A
137. slope,] slopes C [B has s typed over comma]
138. sky] sky, B, C
139. aeons] acons C
140. strown] strewn B, C
141. blanket] blankets B, C
142. slopes] slope B, C
143. road] wood B, C
144. around;] about; B, C
145. Southern Sea] southern sea B, C
146. travellers’] traveller’s B, C
147. for ever] forever A, B, C
148. outline, . . . peak.] outline. B, C
149. gods.] gods. ¶ B, C
150. down] downward B, C
151. gods’] god’s B, C
152. Celephaïs] Celephais B, C
153. Celephaïs,] Celephais, B, C
154. Celephaïs] Celephais B, C
155. zoogs,] Zoogs, B, C
156. Cerenerian Sea.] Cerenarian Sea. A; Cerenarian sea. B, C
157. loose] lose C
158. Thok.] Throk. A, B [revised by HPL], C
159. dusk] disk B, C
160. bholes] dholes C
161. beings] things B, C
162. Thok] Throk A, B [revised by HPL], C
163. impassive] impressive B, C
164. dankness] darkness B, C
165. Thok] Throk A, B [revised by HPL], C
166. Pnath,] Pnoth, B [revised by HPL], C
167. bhol
es;] dholes; C
168. bhole] dhole C
169. Bholes] Dholes C
170. bhole,] dhole, C
171. Pnath] Pnoth B [revised by HPL], C
172. and its approaches] om. B, C
173. Thok’s] Throk’s A, B [revised by HPL], C
174. Pnath;] Pnoth; B [revised by HPL], C
175. bhole,] dhole, C
176. Thok’s] Throk’s A, B [revised by HPL], C
177. wriggling, and thereafter] wriggling; and hereafter C
178. bhole] dhole C
179. Thok’s] Throk’s A, B [revised by HPL], C
180. strown] strewn B, C
181. Celephaïs] Celephais C
182. web-footed] red-footed B, C
183. cities),] cities A, B [comma added by HPL in B]
184. gugs.] Gugs. A, B, C
185. gugs,] Gugs, A, B, C
186. trap-door] trap door A, B, C
187. gugs] Gugs A, B, C
188. diorite] diarote C
189. Celephaïs,] Celephais, B, C
190. gugs’] Gugs’ A, B, C
191. trap-door] trap door A, B, C
192. gugs] Gugs A, B, C
193. grow (. . .),] grow, (. . .) A, B [revised by HPL]
194. gugs] Gugs A, B, C
195. coterminous] conterminous C
196. gugs] Gugs A, B, C
197. sleep,] sleep C
198. gugs,] Gugs, A, B, C
199. gugs] Gugs A, B, C
200. Nehemiah] Nepemiah B [corrected by HPL], C
201. obiit] obit B, C
202. gugs.] Gugs. A, B, C
203. Cyclopean] cyclopean A, B, C
204. gugs,] Gugs, A, B, C
205. gug] Gug A, B, C
206. gugs] Gugs A, B, C
207. Pnath.] Pnoth. B [revised by HPL], C
208. gugs] Gugs A, B, C
209. darkness.] darkness. One ghoul now crept ahead to see if the hour of the Gug’s resting had been correctly timed; upon returning with an affirmative nod, the whole party shambled along in the manner of ghouls, Carter imitating the gait of his companions with much skill. They went very silently, but such is the sharpness of smell among the ghasts that their progress was not long unmarked. Almost as soon A [excised]
210. gugs’] Gugs’ A, B, C
211. gugs] Gugs A, B, C
212. gug] Gug A, B, C
213. gug] Gug A, B, C
214. but] but had B, C
215. animals,] animals B, C
216. gug] Gug A, B, C
217. wobbled] wabbled B [corrected by HPL], C
218. gug] Gug A, B, C
219. gugs] Gugs A, B, C
220. voice,] voice C
221. gug,] Gug, A, B, C
222. Cyclopean] cyclopean A, B, C
223. gugs.] Gugs. C
224. blackness;] blackness B, C
225. gugs,] Gug C [capitalised in B by HPL]
226. gug] Gug C [capitalised in B by HPL]
227. Ones’] One’s B, C
228. chased] chased, B, C
229. gugs,] Gugs, C [capitalised in B by HPL]
230. Cyclopean] cyclopean A, B, C
231. gugs] Gugs C [capitalised in B by HPL]
232. gugs] Gugs C [capitalised in B by HPL]
233. gugs.] Gugs. C [capitalised in B by HPL]
234. into] onto C
235. gugs.] Gugs. C [capitalised in B by HPL]
236. gugs] Gugs C [capitalised in B by HPL]
237. gug.] Gug. C [capitalised in B by HPL]
238. two kinsfolk] kinsfolk B; kinfolk C
239. trap-door] trap door A, B, C
240. gugs,] Gugs, C [capitalised by HPL in B]
241. thousandfold] thousand fold C
242. gugs,] Gugs, C [capitalised by HPL in B]
243. trap-door] trap door A, B, C
244. Ones’ curse] One’s curse B; One’s curst C
245. gug] Gug C [capitalised by HPL in B]
246. the] these B, C
247. zoogs] Zoogs C
248. abyss,] abysss, C
249. Leng. Therefore] Leng, therefore B, C
250. Celephaïs,] Celephais, B [corrected by HPL], C
251. Ooth-Nargai] Oooth-Nargai C
252. ash tree] ash-tree A, B, C
253. lava-gatherer] lava-gatherers B, C
254. zoogs] Zoogs C
255. zoogs.] Zoogs. C
256. within at least] at least within B, C
257. zoogs] Zoogs C
258. zoogs,] Zoogs, C
259. on] upon B, C
260. zoog] Zoog C
261. zoogs;] Zoogs; C
262. newcomers,] newcomers B [corrected by HPL], C
263. zoogs.] Zoogs. C
264. zoogs] Zoogs C
265. zoogs] Zoogs C
266. annual] om. B, C
267. their] the C
268. zoogs] Zoogs C
269. the] om. B, C
270. zoog] Zoog C
271. zoogs.] Zoogs. C
272. zoogs] Zoogs C
273. zoogs] Zoogs C
274. the] that B, C [B apparently corrected by Barlow]
275. Celephaïs,] Celephais, B [corrected by HPL], C
276. Maltese;] maltese, C
277. has] had B, C
278. shewing] showing A, B, C
279. in] in the B, C
280. sea-tavern] sea tavern A, B, C
281. Celephaïs,] Celephais, B [corrected by HPL], C
282. Celephaïs,] Celephais, B [corrected by HPL], C
283. Celephaïs.] Celephais. B [corrected by HPL], C
284. Inganok,] Inqanoth, B; Inquanok, C
285. a] om. C
286. Inganok] Inquanok B, C
287. Inganok] Inquanok B, C
288. captain] Captain B, C
289. ox-carts] ox carts A, B, C
290. sea-taverns] sea taverns A, B, C
291. Inganok,] Inquanok, B, C
292. slopes,] slope, B, C
293. Celephaïs.] Celephais. B, C
294. green] om. C
295. ports on the oceans] parts B, C
296. Inganok,] Inkanok, A; Inquanok, B, C
297. Inganok] Inquanok B, C
298. desert] descent B, C
299. truly] om. B, C
300. naught.] nought. C
301. high-priest.] High Priest. A, B, C
302. Celephaïs,] Celephais, B [corrected by HPL], C
303. attempt] attempts B, C
304. high-priest,] High Priest, A, B, C
305. sought] sought out B, C
306. Celephaïs’] Celephais’ B [corrected by HPL], C
307. Celephaïs] Celephais B [corrected by HPL], C
308. Inganok,] Inquanok, B, C
309. Inganok] Inquanok B, C
310. Inganok.] Inkanok. A; Inquanok. B, C
311. Celephaïs] Celephais B [corrected by HPL], C
312. seems] seemed C
313. city,] city C
314. ecstasies] extasies A
315. novelties] novelies A
316. rose-crystal] rose crystal B, C
317. anointed] annointed B [corrected by HPL]; an-/nointed C
318. stubbly] stubby C
319. climbed] clumbed C
320. daemon-sultan] daemon sultan A, B, C
321. Celephaïs] Celephais B [corrected by HPL], C
322. Celephaïs] Celephais B [corrected by HPL], C
323. the] that B, C
324. miles of] om. B, C
325. Celephaïs] Celephais B [corrected by HPL], C
326. the] om. C
327. sea-wall,] sea wall, A, B, C
328. Inganok,] Inquanok, B, C
329. starlight] starlit B, C
330. sea-taverns;] sea taverns; A, B, C
331. tales,] tales B, C
332. Celephaïs,] Celephais, B [corrected by HPL], C
333. onyx-miner] onyx miner A, B, C
334. Celephaïs] Celephais B [corrected by HPL], C<
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335. cloud-hung] om. B, C
336. then] they B, C
337. Inganok,] Inquanok, B, C
338. Inganok] Inqanok B, C
339. Celephaïs,] Celephais, B [corrected by HPL]; Celephais C
340. that] the B, C
341. Inganok] Inquanok B, C
342. shantak-bird] Shantak-bird C
343. Inganok] Inquanok B, C
344. high-priest] High-Priest A, B, C
345. from] from the C
346. Ogrothan,] Ogrothan A, B; Ograthan C
347. Celephaïs.] Celephais. B [corrected by HPL], C
348. onyx,] onyx B, C
349. sea-tavern] sea tavern A, B, C
350. Inganok,] Inquanok, B, C
351. Inganok,] Inquanok, B, C
352. shantak-bird] Shantak-bird C
353. dexterous] dextrous C
354. Inganok,] Inquanok, B, C
355. height] heights C
356. Ones] end of B
357. open;] open, C
358. temple’s] temple C
359. priests.] beings. C
360. that] the C
361. of] om. C
362. parterres] porterres C
363. lagoons and] lagoon’s C
364. shantak-birds,] Shantak-birds, C
365. Inganok’s] Inquanok’s C
366. learnt] learned C
367. shantak-birds] Shantak-birds C
368. shantaks] Shantaks C
369. Inganok,] Inquanok, C
370. Inganok] Inkanok A; Inquanok C
371. shantak-bird.] Shantak-bird. C
372. strown] strewn C
373. Cyclopean] cyclopean A, C
374. squares yards wide] squares, yards wide, C
375. see,] see C
376. right-hand] right hand C
377. These] The C
378. low] om. C
379. those] these C
380. mitred] pitred C
381. laps] caps C
382. shantak-birds] Shantak-birds C
383. him;] him, C
384. shantaks] Shantaks C
385. shantaks,] Shantaks, C
386. shantak-bird] Shantak-bird C
387. lie.] be. C
388. Inganok] Inquanok C
389. shantak] Shantak C
390. shantak] Shantak C
391. Inganok’s] Inquanok’s C
392. geographick] geographic C
393. shantak] Shantak C
394. shantak] Shantak C
395. shantak] Shantak C
396. windswept] wind-swept A, C
397. high-priest] High-Priest A, C
398. Inganok] Inkanok A; Inquanok C
399. moonbeasts] moon-beasts A, C
400. Inganok;] Inquanok; C
401. Inganok’s] Inquanok’s C
402. diorite] diarite C
403. Great Abyss.] great abyss. A
404. Inganok,] Inquanok, C
405. shantak-birds] Shantak-birds C
406. shantaks] Shantaks C
407. paws,] paws A, C
408. flitting,] flitting A, C
409. and] om. C